So, here is my feedback:
Arelem
Great atmosphere, very dark with a lot of power in the hook. The synth pad in the verse part however is more soft in the background, this creates a huge dynamic gap in the instrumental but this is filled with the energy of you rapping pretty hard over the beat. Your flow is 99% on point, there are two or three little things not really on the beat, but given the fact that you are not a rapper this is awesome. Props for this! I really like the roughness in your voice, very crispy. I´m hearing also some sort of formant shifter and I know from other entries that you like to alter your voice as an effect, but in this case I don’t like what I´m hearing. You definitely have a voice for a rap artist and the talent to flow over a beat, I would recommend you to keep doing rap songs from time to time.
The lyrics may seem funny, but while listening I take the message very serious because it is deep and this is what I like about your entry. Alone the intro talk is very is strong and convincing, the melodic dramatic beat fits perfectly. The beat is what I expect from something in the trap genre. The drum samples you picked are „classic“ trap sounds, of course, one could argue about the tone of your 808. But all in all it is very solid trap beat I´m hearing. The only thing I already mentioned what I´m missing is some hard hitting brass or something to add more low frequency to the beat.
In sum, really good work.
Denny7794
I think this is not really fitting the genre, with both eyes closed (and ears) I would say this is „something“ like Crunk. It sounds like the early stages of hip hop to my ears, so pretty far away from modern standards of urban music.
I find that robotic fx really funny, and that Russian accent is pretty cool.
I can also hear you changed the mix, so now it sounds more balanced than before.
I would recommend you to do more research on both genres, Trap and Crunk to get more familiar with sound selection and melodic patterns etc. But still, compliments for finishing your project.
Kukobass
First ten seconds remind of a GTA game, can’t remember which one, I think it was GTA IV.
I wouldn’t really call this Trap or Crunk, but it is very close to the vibe. That could be the little brother of Chill Trap or something. I enjoy your entry, it gives me a relaxed feeling, very calm sounds overall. I like the fact that you sampled yourself. Your drum sample are the more softer sample selection for Trap beats, in Trap the 808 is just that typical bass tone you hear in the production.
I find the whispering to fit the vibe perfectly, to my ears this could definitely work as background music for some pc game music.
In sum, it doesn’t really fit the genre but I have to make you big compliments, one can really hear your development from SWC to SWC. Keep doing your thing!
The Exponent
Strong trap beat with a great fx drop hook, hardest entry for me! Good job on the hook and the overall sound selection. The mix of is very solid, although the „haters“ has little bit too much reverb and the rap part is little too shy compared to the hard hitting beat, but the rest is well balanced.
I would say your rap and flow is the weakest part of your entry, but I still have to give you big props for this. It is still convincing and your track works for me really good. While listening my focus is more on the beat and not so on the lyrics, they are more in the back and not in your face, so I´m missing the punch from the mix.
Overall excellent work
Ronson79
Hmm, hard here. I first want to mention what I really like about your entry. I find your voice and energy in the hook great, the tone in your voice is really convincing, and I like your energy while flowing.
The lyrics are very deep, I like them, and the beat is really nice, I absolutely like that grimey vibe. That piano melody in the beginning is sick.
BUT - to my ears this is not what I would call Trap per definition. It is very close to the genre and it scratches the surface with sound selection, triplet drum pattern and 808 bass. But the most important ingredient is missing, and that is the vibe in the beat and the flow. Your drum beat pattern is 3/4, I think this is the thing why this is not really Trap to me. The triplets are usually made within a 4/4 beat with the hi hats or the rappers flow, and not with the beat itself. Also, to me the rapper is pretty lame while performing, it is not the same energy and drive as in the hook, which I prefer much more. His flow is pretty standard the House-Mouse one syllable rhyme technique. The tone of the voice is way too soft for a deep track like this. So I find it a bit funny that you mentioned my rhyme patterns to spice things up btw.
Don´t get me wrong, your entry is pretty solid, and I like the topic and the beat, but it doesn’t really fit into my understanding of Trap music. Still, big compliments for your entry. To me, it sounds like backpack rap disguised in a Trap outfit.
EsteveCorbera
The theme at the very beginning and at the end should have been your main theme and melody. The perfect loop for a Trap type beat is from 00:12-00:26. That type of melody is the typical „banger beat“ in Trap. The next part until 01:00 is still in that Trap sector but after that you’re leaving the genre. Trap is not that experimental as you did with your entry, and also Trap is very hard driven by the musical vibe, you will here most Trap tunes in min9 keys, so very dark or pretty aggressive and forward.
Even though I don’t really like the singing here I still find it to fit your entry and I have lots of respect because this is commitment to the SWC. It has some sort of rap style to it.
Props to you for leaving your comfort zone!
One thing you „should“ pay attention for trap beats is the drum sample choice and the tone of the 808, they have a certain sound.
Treyt
The beat is really hard and nice arranged. The vibe is absolutely what I expect from the Trap genre. This is a bit more festival orientated to me. I like the energy and the sound selection.
You have some quick flow patterns, but I think you are off beat on to many occasions while rapping. You should be more delicate with how many syllables you can fit into one bar. I totally understand, you are not used to rap this fast, so I still have respect for your performance, the tone and character in your voice. The mix is balanced, but I don’t like the pumping effect, this makes the whole mix sound a bit cheap to my ears.
Overall, good work
Canese
Great sample choice, nice vibe, I´m bumping my head. Unfortunately, I can’t say anything about your own flow, and of course this rapper sounds absolutely dope. Fits the beat really well. 2 times the same verse makes a bit repetitive. And also, as I am a beat maker myself, I can tell that making sample beats are easier in terms of melody and vibe for hip hop productions. It is absolutely not cheating, don’t get me wrong here. Sampling is an art for itself, no doubt about it, and you did really fine on this one, so I hope you know what I mean.
Overall, I find your entry very dope but I can hear (and see) that you didn’t spend much time on this, there is 20 second of silence at the end. I´m pretty sure you can do better, regarding the level of your entry.
JeroenZuiderwijk
I like that typical dark Trap atmosphere you created, it has that grimey energy I really appreciate. Those „WHAT“ vocal samples and the stab hits give it that Crunk feeling also.
Of course, the mix/recording have lots of room for improvement and also the rap performance, flow, and the arrangement could be more structured for a real song with hook etc. But I find it great that you finished something.
One thing you „should“ pay attention for trap beats is the drum sample choice and the tone of the 808, they have a certain sound.
What I learned from this challenge:
- how to produce a short play arrangement in the trap genre
- better understanding of sonic concepts of clipping, limiting, compression and saturation
- how to listen to the low mids while mixing and how to hear the relationship between low and high frequencies
- how to rap in a much faster speed and flow than I usually freestyle
- people prefer Trap over Crunk
Thank you very much for the feedback!
My Top 5:
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1st The Exponent
2nd Arelem
3rd Treyt
4th JeroenZuiderwijk
5th EseteveCorbera