Thank you for your entry. I will lead by example, since we still have 36 hours in this particular game, and you're allowed to edit/re-upload your entry/post until the deadline has been reached (see
game mechanics for the Songwriting Competition).
First and foremost, I'd love to know what samples you've used in this production, especially since it's fairly minimalistic. It is hard to spot in your video, especially certain "subtle layers" like various noises
And since it's "minimalistic", I also miss some "ear candy".
Let me explain what I mean:
- the vocals for examples sound a bit "nasal", I'd actually go back and look at the frequency range between 460Hz and 800Hz, maybe also use a proximity tool to pull the vocalist a bit closer to the mic. On small speakers, the voice does stick out too much IMHO. And this doesn't help much on large speakers either, sadly. I'd also maybe leave some breathing in, or even experiment with reverse hall effects to create a bit of tension and more powerful interaction.
- there is barely any movement or "Interesting things" going on. I get that this is rap, and rap can be minimalistic. But the synth like is pushed too far into the back, stays slightly off center, doesn't move. The beat doesn't evolve that much either and the hi hats overpower the kick drum. I'd actually raise the synth a bit more volume wise, add a bit of stereo panning automation. For the beat section, I'd actually drop certain sections ever so often to not have a 2s loop constantly replaying, maybe even add some glitch effects. Or maybe add a second "clap" type for variation, plus maybe a properly timed (pre-delay) reverb as subtle effect. To tame the 16th at, I'd roll off the high end a bit.
- frequency wise, I'd definitely clean up the low-end section. There is just too much clashing there IMO, while the vocals are almost cut too high. This feels muddy and non-balanced to my ears.
Other than that, it is an interesting approach to what has been given to you in terms of samples.
But I'm curious if you can still "build up" on that.