Mix Challenge

So I redid the lyrics and vocals. I'm not sure if I like the vocal takes as much as the version in my original post, and I tried a couple of different takes. Should I replace it with this one? Any feedback is appreciated!

https://soundcloud.com/user-543357626/s ... al_sharing

Lyrics:
Got my feet stuck in the sand
Can't tell where the current goes
feel it slippin through my hands
feel it on down through my toes

out like a ship in the pouring rain
feel it comin on like a hurricane
got all this lightnin' in my brain
lost at sea 'till I go insane

I don't know where I need to go
can't find any resemblance of hope
It's helpless for me, how can I cope
please tell me something cuz I don't know

cuz I'm losin' it out there
can't seem to find any air
chest tightenin, sight gettin thin
can't get no traction, spiralin

(Chorus)
I'm underwater
don't remember how to swim
head underwater
try-in ta get back in
So I hold on tighter
to a place back then
can't be the fighter
I know that I can't win
(Chorus)

So can someone throw me a line
which of these thoughts are mine
tell me what is my crime
why does it feel like I'm serving time

can't believe I could feel this helpless
can't believe you could be so selfish
leavin' me out ta sea with the shellfish
what'd I do to you, can you tell this

got me drownin here in my thoughts
get the plank out and I walk
air my lungs out and I cough
cannot breathe, how can I talk

I'm slowly sinking under
to a place I can't recover
soon to be another
just a fading memory of her

I like the second version of the lyrics better.
The song gives me a claustrophobic underwater vibe and goes well with the lyrics. What I am missing is a little more harmonic variation in the music of the verse. The single note synth /drone sounding like a sonar ping gets a little boring during the verses. It works well in the chorus, when the other instruments change the harmonic contest. I think a little bit of harmonic change would improve the sound of the verse.
You did a great job with the vocal treatment.

KukoBass wrote: ↑

Thu Aug 18, 2022 09:11 CEST

I like the second version of the lyrics better.
The song gives me a claustrophobic underwater vibe and goes well with the lyrics. What I am missing is a little more harmonic variation in the music of the verse. The single note synth /drone sounding like a sonar ping gets a little boring during the verses. It works well in the chorus, when the other instruments change the harmonic contest. I think a little bit of harmonic change would improve the sound of the verse.
You did a great job with the vocal treatment.

I can see what you're getting at and I've tried playing around with adding something. Ultimately, it changes the tone or atmosphere of the song. I can't quite seem to get something to match it in a way I like better than where it currently is. That's not to say that something couldn't bring it to the next level, but I can't find it. The only option that I did like (kind of) made it too similar to the chorus and then there wasn't much distinction between the verse and chorus. For me, the automation bringing the 'sonar ping' in and out keeps it interesting enough and that combined with the vocals works for me; it's not too cluttered but it isn't boring.

-Arelem

I have edited my first post and uploaded the new version.

Hi,
This month's task was a picture theme, writing music for the picture. Fortunately, the task was a very exciting picture.
At first glance, it was obvious that this water is not the slow, comfortable, sluggish flowing water. The whole picture is vibrant, exciting, full of movements, there are a lot of small and large bubbles that rise up and fall down at the same time.

Therefore, my first thought was that a bouncier, slightly sharper instrument would be my main theme, so I chose the harpsichord.
Once it became harpsichord and fountain, it was a straight path to classical instrumentation with strings and woodwinds.
I tried to write music that fits the picture and is constantly in motion: rising and falling movements in music, pulsation, slightly faster rhythm, etc. That's all I managed to get together this weekend:



VST:
Spitfire BBC Core
Spitfire Originals Epic Choir
Cineharpsichord

FX:
Pro Q-3
SSL Native Bus Comp 2
Sonimus Britson
Seventh Heaven
bx_digital V3
Gullfoss
bx_townhouse
Abbey Road TG Master
Oxford Inflator
Oxford Limiter
TR5 Tape 99
Youlean LM
SPAN

Hello everyone, and thanks for the nice topic proposed.
Until today I had not listened to the other participants' songs: they seem very appropriate and interesting to me. Surely if I had listened to them I would have been influenced and probably would have addressed something similar. Instead, I recovered an old song (it was on an old Atari floppy - from 1990, I suppose - labelled "to be completed") that I remembered having aside and adjusted it a bit for the purpose: ideally I wanted to represent a turbulent stream running towards the valley. The result is a fairly smooth "monolithic" piece full of winds: the flavor is a bit gypsy, a bit afro / mex and a bit 70ies. I hope that I have not put together too many colors and that you like it.

I was lucky enough to have on loan for a few days from a producer friend of mine (a professional musician ....) who went on vacation his laptop which also contains the Kontakt libraries that I only knew by reputation: I must say that these are very accurate sounds, which unfortunately I could only partially exploit. I hope that there will be for me another opportunity to be able to use them more fully; in particular, the following were used:
- Classic guitar "Sketch Nylon" by Iurii Zinin
- "Pop Bass" and "Flute" from the standard Kontakt libraries
- "Session Horns Pro" by Native Instrument
- "Nylon Guitar" by Swing! by ProjectSAM
-The Drums "AR Modern White kit" from Native Instruments Abbey Road Modern Drummer MK2 suite
-The other sounds are from Steinberg's "HALion" libraries
It was very interesting (even if tiring: the learning curve of new software was not so fast for me) to work with extremely valid professional sounds and products: surely the work could have been refined further, but time is over: the laptop has already been returned.

The song "Fast Stream Runto River" is available here in WAV 44k / 24bit version:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XtFXSO ... sp=sharing

and here in MP3 / 192k version:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1s2AeWz ... sp=sharing



I hope you enjoy!
Soon!

GamaGama

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Please get your production ready and submitted (through the forum) today.
And to make it easier for me to create the collection post, please update your initial post with the appropriate links, or explicitly mark your entry as "final entry". Thank you.

My submission for this round:

WAV: https://drive.google.com/file/d/121CMI9 ... sp=sharing
FLAC: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1tPuCf7 ... sp=sharing
MP3: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1nTZV16 ... sp=sharing

The summer is ending and I'm returned back to my day job (sadly). I'm not quite happy with this project, but at least I can bring something to the table this time. Trying to incorporate my old drafts with my new skills and tools.

Exploring an underwater is almost like visiting another planet. It is very dangerous, yet very engaging journey, full of beautiful and thrilling moments. The whole new world to explore, that requires special skills and abilities to survive, completely out of your comfort zone.

Instruments and techniques:

1. For drums I used LinnDrum samples.
2. The electric bass is "Ample Bass P Lite"
3. The electric guitars (clean and crunchy lead) is MusicLab "RealLPC"
4. SampleScience's "Cinematic Piano" stands for itself.
5. SampleScience's "Deamwaves" is a synth pad in the intro.
6. Audiolatry's "MEL-lofi" used for background choir and strings.
7. TAL Bassline 101 is used for synth lead and bell sequence.
8. Several free sample packs were used to create special effects.
9. VSCO2 Rompler used for some percussion and impact sounds.

Produced in FL Studio 20.9.2.

Technical details:

My submission
Olli H: One Lonely Drop At A Time
https://drive.google.com/file/d/15l0Gsd ... sp=sharing

For the lack of descent ideas I had already decided not to attend this month. But then I get this last minute idea.

I didn't have time for any production, mixing etc. I just played in my rough ideas. So in this submission there's surely many reasons to draw out some points.

Guitars: real
Shaker: real
Bass: Modo
Vox: late night last minute whispering by me
Violin and Viola: NI

DAW: Reaper


EDIT: words and chords taken away

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