SONGWRITING COMPETITION - SWC066 February 2023 - Winners announced

[Arelem]

Hello All,

Updated to my final submission. I know that I am exceeding the -14 LUFS, but I could not get the track to meet that level without it just ending up very quiet. In this case, I am willing to accept the point deduction for it.
The lyrics are very tongue-in-cheek 'complaining' about the minor inconveniences in life.



Lyrics

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Try to watch my shows but the internet is stuttering
suffering through while the Netflix is buffering
Try to check the time but the watch battery's low
and I can't use the charger cause it's powerin my phone
guess I'll hop on the Xbox and play some games
now it's got an update and it's Gigs for days
While I wait I guess I'll make some food
but I made too much, what I am to do
Now I'm headin to the store, gas light fades in
don't wanna make an extra stop at the station
if I don't do it now I'll do it in the morning
listening to music but this station's boring
back at home, how's that download going?
well it's fine-ly done but the day is closing
I need a full night's sleep, and I fill with dread
gotta work in the mornin so it's time for bed

I got, first world problems
first world problems
aint much to you
but to me it's a problem
I got, first world problems
first world problems
what can I do
my first world problems

Man I hate when I'm driving and I hit some traffic
I know there's an accident, can we just drive past it
chilling at the office tryn ta get my work done
got an email from the boss bout some office fun
some stupid party for a teamwork bonding
just wanna get my work done, get the weekend started
finally home, and I crash on the sofa
can't find the remote, turnin cushions over
Check the porch is my package there
but I got a notice of delay up in my email
hate when I'm browsing, click on a website
they asking if the cookie settings are alright
The fridge is stocked but I can't be bothered
and take-out delivery charges 5 dollars
plus that, I got no cash for tipping
and now that it's here, I gotta get up from sitting

Details

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DAW is FL Studio
The lead in the verses was made using Glaze
The piano is The Maverick with a custom effects rack on it
The rest is just basic drum samples
Effects used are just some basic compression and EQ.
Trackspacer was used to create space for the vocals.

[The Exponent]

Hello All,

Here is what I have so far. I'm still trying to think of ways to improve it, but I wanted to see what you all thought.

The lyrics are very tongue-in-cheek 'complaining' about the minor inconveniences in life.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1mJIz4L ... share_link

Dig this! It seems quite polished already.

[Mellow Browne]

Hello All,

Here is what I have so far. I'm still trying to think of ways to improve it, but I wanted to see what you all thought.

The lyrics are very tongue-in-cheek 'complaining' about the minor inconveniences in life.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1mJIz4L ... share_link

Very good so far what I´m hearing. I would raise the vocals a tiny bit and lower the 808 therefore, so your vocals become more "in your face" with that roughness in your voice. I can't understand every word you are saying, it would be nice if you could provide the lyrics. Your rap part will also become more coherent with the hook, which I find remarkably much more up front.
I like the tone of your voice here and I didn't expect such a tight flow!
Maybe you could spice up the arrangement a little bit with drops and mutes or something to emphasise certain words?

[Arelem]

Thanks for the feedback The Exponent and Mellow Browne. I changed my original post to add the lyrics and update the song in the link. I didn't feel like I needed to do anything drastic so the changes are pretty minor but hopefully, they help make the vocals a bit clearer in the mix.

[JeroenZuiderwijk]

I'm working on a track.....struggeling with the lyrics. But hopefully I have it ready for the deadline. been listening to Migos a lot thanks to this challenge :-) nice!

[Mister Fox]

A friendly reminder:
Including today, 7 days left to submit your production.

So far, we have 1 entry -- with some interaction, and with 1 additional track in production.



If you want to access the extended game mechanics of the Songwriting Competition (asking for feedback during production), please try to release your first edits within the next 3 days to have enough time to get possible feedback (if needed/wanted) and continue to work on your song. Please also remember, vocals are not mandatory -- instrumentals are just as welcome.

And to those sitting on the fence - please don't feel scared off and think "the bar is set too high, I will never make it" - set yourself a shorter private deadline. Just make music, submit your entry, join the conversation. See where this goes.

By joining, you're already a winner. The rest is bonus.

[JeroenZuiderwijk]

Hello All,

Here is what I have so far. I'm still trying to think of ways to improve it, but I wanted to see what you all thought.
The lyrics are very tongue-in-cheek 'complaining' about the minor inconveniences in life.

Arelem,

Respect! this is a very fun, cool and interesting production. The lyrics are awesome! :-)

[JeroenZuiderwijk]

Hi all,
This is the music I wrote for SWC066. It is not finished yet...by far. I'm working on the vocals (I really want vocals to be part of it but I'm not a rap artist.....but I've already wrote the lyrics....a couple of versions already). I'm used to writing songs on guitar with intro, verse, chorus etc. So I decided to go for that approach to see if that would work for me. Here is a first (actualy 100th ;-) ) draft (this is NOT the final entry link, that one is in my last post)

https://1drv.ms/u/s!Ahp8xH6KRIfbgTUxADw ... 6?e=hr5mak (music starts at around 7 sec...sorry, forgot to cut the silence before the intro...I'll fix that later on.)

[Mellow Browne]

Hi all,
This is the music I wrote for SWC066. It is not finished yet...by far. I'm working on the vocals (I really want vocals to be part of it but I'm not a rap artist.....but I've already wrote the lyrics....a couple of versions already). I'm used to writing songs on guitar with intro, verse, chorus etc. So I decided to go for that approach to see if that would work for me. Here is a first (actualy 100th ;-) ) draft:

https://1drv.ms/u/s!Ahp8xH6KRIfbgTUxADw ... 6?e=hr5mak (music starts at around 7 sec...sorry, forgot to cut the silence before the intro...I'll fix that later on.)

Hey Jeroen,

this is a cool WIP, it has a bit from both worlds, Trap and Crunk. I'm really curious to hear the final version with the lyrics. This goes in a good direction from what I can hear.
Maybe you could sidechain your kick from the 808 bass to get more clarity in the low end? Oh, and don't forget to lower the volume of the stab hits and the vocal samples, they are pretty loud compared to the rest.

I hope I can finish my project within the next two days.

[denny7794]

Hello, everyone!
That's my submission.
Don't take it too seriously

final:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1DfwoXb ... sp=sharing