SONGWRITING COMPETITION - SWC087 November 2024 - Submissions until 24-NOV-2024 23:59 UTC+1/CET

[Mister Fox]

The forum has an edit function in the form of a button with a pen in it.
I assume you didn't want to quote your own post as a follow-up.

[A Future in Noise]

Hello guys and gals, my submission has gotten edited. I thought I'd mention it, since my post is on the first page, and I guess no one ever looks at that page now. Still just WIP, though.

[A Future in Noise]

Ok Guys, Here is my Submission. Was tweaking for a bit but decided, I better just post it to get the reactions. Putting on my tough skin suit for just in case. Dont hold back, it only helps me get better.
LOL,,,, Thanks for the opportunity to be a part.

I liked the part until 1:06 very much. There is a tension in the air. It's like a movie, during a sequence where there's almost a lull but the viewer knows that something dramatic is about to happen. Then, at 1:06, there is a shift to something that has a slightly different tone - the tension sort of stops (at least for me). I think it would be better to go straight to the dramatic.

Cause when I looked at the graph of your file in my DAW (because I imported it), I thought there would be something dramatic, or at least loud at 1:46. Because the amplitude increases a lot here. But I think the part from 1:46 until the end is difficult to judge. Something needs to be done, though - especially that some notes/drumbeats, at least until 2:06, are very out of “time” (i.e. way too far from their exact place in terms of quarter notes, eighth notes, etc.).

It's also very difficult to understand the amplitude of all the peaks (they are on the plus side of 0 dB). A drum comes in at 1:46, but what I hear in my headphones doesn't really correspond to what I see on the screen. So I don't understand at all.

The funny and very brief interlude at 24.625 seconds (of a synth bass?) is very eccentric, but of course you can do that.

At the beginning of the song (up to 1:06 at least or maybe even 1:46), the steel-string guitar is very precise. It sounds real, too, but in its “temporal” precision it's so precise that I don't know if it's a plugin that sounds unusually real, or if it's a guitarist playing very precisely. I don't dare to guess which. (And I'm having a bit of trouble telling from the specs what are plugins and what are not.)

Well - now I've got food in the oven that I need to take care of, but I hope you can find something of value in my feedback.

[R0boooo]

Thank you sir for your candid analogy from what you hear in the submission. Im taking it all in and Im learning, I appreciate you. I only used a real guitar for percussions for some chord strums and a Roland Fantom Rack module for Bass and the steel string guitar sound. The rest are Kontakt instruments I played. I just went with what I felt. The tension and build to be honest, I didnt think of it, it was just a shift to get the ideas in my head out. Most of the time in this situation I would go back and re organize for a singer or for a picture. But the scenes are there. The wave graph to sound possibly could be the low end eq I tried to add to give the palm Kick sound on the body of the guitar more punch. Im learning though, again thanks.